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Once Upon a Lunchtime FULL COMIC by Jackoburra Once Upon a Lunchtime FULL COMIC by Jackoburra
Howdy peeps! I hope you're all doing well! Here is the latest short story that I've worked on :> Plus it's the 3rd prize winner of the Manga Jiman 2015 competition (I couldn't help entering again haha - it's a compulsion!). Like Oh Crumbs! and To Sail a Moon, it's in the form of a poem in a whimsical world of wonder and magic and ... I just hope you enjoy reading it XD

The theme for this competition was Bright Young Things

I created Mucker, Twiggy, and Bramble for a poster I designed for the 2014 competition, and I didn't really have a story in mind. All I wanted to capture was the pivotal moment of three little girls chancing upon a star, and I wanted characters who were purely fun to draw, so these three magicked their way up :> But by the time the next competition rolled by, I had been chewing over the idea of how their pivotal moment could turn out, and thought it would be a sweet opportunity to try their story out :D ... that didn't stop me from leaving it to the last two weeks again though XD By heck this was fun to draw :D Despite the comic not being that old, I can already nitpick loads of things in there, but it was a whole bunch of fun exploring how to draw all this out so ... yeah! A great experience! \o/ 

... haha I don't think I'll ever get used to the idea of squeezing a story down to eight pages XD It's just not my thing at all XD So difficult! Hardly any space to breeeeeathe XD Plus I'm gonna have to work on some non-poem comics again, ideally with more pages :> And I do have plans for that ;> 

I'd love to visit these girls again one day, and see what other adventures they get up to :> And I hope you've enjoyed this story :D

Katja
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:iconkaijol:
Kaijol Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
love your story!
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Gigglezalotz Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2016  Student Traditional Artist
Oh my gosh this was such a cute story I loved it :heart: :la:
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MiamoryHJ Featured By Owner May 19, 2016  Student Artist
Amazing! ^o^ I missed your comics! :D
thank you for sharing it, it was very interesting and enjoyable! And Twiggy got her apple pie :3 :happybounce:
It is amazing how you managed to do this in 2 weeks! o.o
You drew traditionally then edited and added digital text, right?
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Marbaty Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
That's almost a poem ! :iconshaplz: I love it !
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner May 11, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Heheh :> Poems are pretty fun to write :D
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ArmatoKing Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I nearly cried... omg this was so beautifulWaaaah! Clap  
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner May 11, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Aww XD (I'm sorry for the late reply, I'm not very active here) THank you for your kind kind words XD I'm so glad that you enjoyed this! It was a wonderful time working on this comic, so I really appreciate knowing that the story has reached out to you and others too :>
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Firepowerbaby Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2016  Student Traditional Artist
What else? More PIEs ofcourse!!!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner May 11, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
The world could always do with more pies :>
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OlegEvteev Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2016
Nice!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner May 11, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
THank you! :D
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Takykardia Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I've missed your comics, thanks for sharing this (love it). How do you even manage to pace this beast?
Getting the rhyme to work as a text feels like a hurdle in itself and then adding the comic format - dang *lifts hat*.
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Awww, it's really sweet to know that you like them that much :D I've been waiting for months to be able to post this story up XD

As for pacing  ... lots of trial and error XD I already had the story planned out, and so I decided upon a tempo that the poem should be told. Once that was established, I kinda talked/improvised to the beat to see what would naturally flow out. From there I refined things, picked out better words/rhymes, shortened phrases, cut stuff out - gave the story multiple makeovers until it was condensed down to something that would just about fit into an eight-page comic XD I don't think I could ever get it right off the bat, but once you're getting into the swing of things, getting the hang of the beat and searching for rhymes, it becomes a little easier :>
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Takykardia Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ Ah yeah I can imagine you had to iterate a whole bunch!
So far I stick with short rhymes that I can end fairly quickly :p Hey hanks for sharing! it's always interesting/rewarding to hear about the process.
Looking forward to future stuff! (no pressure though)
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LostbunniesofWendy Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Professional Traditional Artist
This is so awesome! Love it a lot!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you! Aww gosh, with all the work that went into this, I'm really glad you're enjoying it :>
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LostbunniesofWendy Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2016  Professional Traditional Artist
It looks like a hell of a work! But as every comic looks superfun!

You are welcome!
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ndunsmo Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016
Yeah, like Sky said, you should seriously public these poem comics into a children's book.  These are brilliant.
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Aw thanks! Yeah, I've had a few peeps mention this now, so I might ask around for advice and see what happens :D
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Skyblue10 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE THIS! Such a cute story, should be published as a book!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Aww thanks XD It would be pretty awesome to draw out as a fully illustrated book :> I guess I should look around and ask for advice about such things XD
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Timberwolfmech Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016
Nice ^-^
...couldn't help but think of Dr Seuss while reading it...had that voice play in my head while reading this...
Still Nice ^-^
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Heh XD Yeah Dr Seuss books are definitely fun :> I haven't read one in a while, but I probably should! Whimsical things are great, so it was a tonne of fun making this comic! :D I'm glad you liked it!
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Fistron Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I liked this. Great complex story.B-)
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
THank you :D It was fun planning everything out! :D
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Fistron Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
😆😆.How are you? I'm Fistron.
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Imaginary-Shadow Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016
Wow, adorable!! X3 And very nicely done~ Congrats on the placement, and ob getting it all together! Wow. :clap:
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Aww wow thank you XD I'm very pleased with how this comic turned out, and I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D
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DoubleDandE Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016   General Artist
Nice comic. I rather like this one, and the pie. :hungry: 
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
THanks XD I want some pie now :9
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DoubleDandE Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016   General Artist
Welcome. Me too. 
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Student Writer
Cute and whimsical, as always!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you :D Making whimsical stories is so fun XD
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Student Writer
You're welcome. And I bet it is!
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simsplayer Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Student Writer
This would be great as a children`s book!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Awww yeah that would be a cool idea XD I'd love to expand all those pages and draw in the amount of details they deserve XD
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simsplayer Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Student Writer
If your willing to put in the work and (i dunno how people sell and promote stuff from deviantart) sell your work as a children`s book, you could make a lot of money if you wanted. But

money isn`t everything, it`s just an idea. :) Still, your art is amazing, and you have good storytelling skills.
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ninjaxluvr Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Student General Artist
You did such a great job!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you! :D It was a lot of fun working on this :> I'm glad it turned out well!
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crippledArachnid Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016
I love the rhyming, kind of Dr Seuss'y. I like it.
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Aww thanks XD Coming up with the rhymes was rather fun :> And yeeeeah Dr Seuss XD I remember how crazy his poems got XD Have to read them again some time :D
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Soullz Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016
Very entertaining :3
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you! :D
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Flek-Lola Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016   Traditional Artist
I loved this! Really awesome! =)
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
THank you so much XD I'm so glad you like it! :D
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Flek-Lola Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016   Traditional Artist
^_^ You're welcome. I really did! :)
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The-Last-Phantom Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
AWESOME!!!

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Mastrerpiece!!!!
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Jackoburra Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
THank you!!! :dance: I'm really glad you think so! XD
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The-Last-Phantom Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Welcome!!!!

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Sweven7 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2016
This is very well-written and well-made!
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